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For you, who is Korea\'s best president? Why?

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I think Korea's best president is Moon jaein.
I think Moon jaein is very friendly.
And I like his message "people is first"

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I think Korea's best president is Moon jaein.
>> I think Korea's best president is Moon Jaein.
>> OR: I believe the best president in Korea is Moon Jaein. 

I think Moon jaein is very friendly.
>> I think Moon Jaein is very friendly.
>> OR: Moon Jaein looks very friendly.

And I like his message "people is first"
>> And I like his message, "People are first."

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