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How can music help with motivation during a workout?

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2024-04-24 432

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Sometimes I imagine a movie without background music.
When I watch a horror movie, I get scared, when I watch a sad movie, I secretly shed tears, and when I watch a funny movie, I laugh without realizing it.
These emotions may be due to the scenes in the movie or the acting of the actors, but in reality, the background music of the movie plays a big role. When I listen to sad music, I feel sad, and when I listen to happy music, I feel good.
A movie wouldn't be really fun if it didn't have background music.
Of course, music plays a big role when exercising.
I always listen to fun and exciting music when I run or ride a bike.
Then, without even realizing it, I feel energized and can run or ride a bike harder and longer.
Also, when I exercise while listening to music, I enjoy it and don't feel bored.
How much less fun would it be if I couldn't listen to music while exercising?
I believe that the role of music during exercise is no less than that of a human coach.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hey there, Sun!

Music can motivate you, improve your mood, and help you relax. It can even help you focus so you can study or work. But different types of music can have different effects. Many people find music helps them concentrate while studying and working.

- Kristine ^^ 

Sometimes I imagine a movie without background music.
>> Correct.
When I watch a horror movie, I get scared, when I watch a sad movie, I secretly shed tears, and when I watch a funny movie, I laugh without realizing it.
>> Correct.
These emotions may be due to the scenes in the movie or the acting of the actors, but in reality, the background music of the movie plays a big role. 
>> While the movie's scenes and actors' performances may be responsible for these feelings, the soundtrack really has a significant impact.
When I listen to sad music, I feel sad, and when I listen to happy music, I feel good.
>> Correct.
A movie wouldn't be really fun if it didn't have background music.
>> Correct. 
Or >> The absence of background music would make a movie less enjoyable.
Of course, music plays a big role when exercising.
>> Correct. 
I always listen to fun and exciting music when I run or ride a bike.
>> Every time I go for a run or ride my bike, I put on some lively music.
Then, without even realizing it, I feel energized and can run or ride a bike harder and longer.
>> Then, I feel energized and can run or ride a bike harder and for longer without even realizing it.
Also, when I exercise while listening to music, I enjoy it and don't feel bored.
>> I also find that working with music is enjoyable and keeps me from becoming bored.
How much less fun would it be if I couldn't listen to music while exercising?
>> Imagine how less enjoyable working out would be if I couldn't listen to music? 
I believe that the role of music during exercise is no less than that of a human coach.
>> Music plays an equally important part in exercising with the coach.
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