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Do dress codes reinforce gender stereotypes?

작성자: 박*호
2024-04-23 341

회원님의 영작문

In Korea, discrimination against women in the workplace was very severe until 1990s.
While male workers wore suits and ties, all female workers had to wear uniforms and were restricted from promotion to high-ranking positions.
However, after the 2000s, uniforms for female employees disappeared except in special service industries such as hotels and restaurants.
Women can dress freely in the same way as men, but are only required to dress as neatly as possible.
In addition, discrimination, such as restrictions on promotion of female employees to senior positions, has disappeared.
Rather, in Korea, because all men are required to serve in the military for two years, women are often promoted faster than men of the same age.
Therefore, I do not think that the argument that dress codes reinforce gender stereotypes is unconvincing in a situation like these days where women are not forced to wear uniforms and have the same freedom of choice of clothing as men.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello there, Sun! 

Dress codes help create a professional and productive environment, promote a professional image, ensure safety, and minimize distractions. Corporate culture and corporate dress codes vary, and the impact of dress code on work performance may vary.

- Kristine ^^ 

In Korea, discrimination against women in the workplace was very severe until 1990s.
>> In Korea, discrimination against women in the workplace was very severe until the 1990s.
While male workers wore suits and ties, all female workers had to wear uniforms and were restricted from promotion to high-ranking positions.
>> Female employees were not allowed to move up to higher levels and had to put on uniforms, whereas male employees wore suits and ties.
However, after the 2000s, uniforms for female employees disappeared except in special service industries such as hotels and restaurants.
>> Correct.
Women can dress freely in the same way as men, but are only required to dress as neatly as possible.
>> Correct.
Or >> Women are simply expected to wear as neatly as possible; otherwise, they are free to dress however they like.
In addition, discrimination, such as restrictions on promotion of female employees to senior positions, has disappeared.
>> In addition, discrimination, such as restrictions on the promotion of female employees to senior positions, has disappeared.
Rather, in Korea, because all men are required to serve in the military for two years, women are often promoted faster than men of the same age.
>> Rather, women in Korea frequently receive promotions ahead of men in the same age group as all men must serve in the military for two years.
Therefore, I do not think that the argument that dress codes reinforce gender stereotypes is unconvincing in a situation like these days where women are not forced to wear uniforms and have the same freedom of choice of clothing as men.
>> Therefore, in a circumstance like this one, when women are not required to wear uniforms and have the same freedom of choice in clothes as men, I do not think it is unreasonable to argue that dress standards reinforce gender stereotypes.
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