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Describe your dream house.

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i'll tell you about my dream house.
actually when i was young, i lived in 50 m2 apartment.
My partent working hard everyday, finally bought them.
since i know that situation, my dream was bought over the 50m2 apartment.
But grown up now, i can understand, it's very hard.
So i'm changed my goal, just have enjoyable life with a child.

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Hello Dan!
That's true! We will never understand one's situation unless we are already "in that" situation. So as early as now, the young generation should understand life situations and not sugar coating them.
Have a nice day!
T. Aki~

I'll tell you about my dream house.
>>> CORRECT!

actually when i was young, i lived in 50 m2 apartment.
>>> Actually when I was young, I lived in a 50m2 apartment.

My partent working hard everyday, finally bought them.
>>> My parents worked hard every day and finally bought them.

since i know that situation, my dream was bought over the 50m2 apartment.
>>> Since I knew that situation, my dream was to buy over the 50m2 apartment.

But grown up now, i can understand, it's very hard.
>>> But grown up now, I can understand, it's very hard.

So i'm changed my goal, just have enjoyable life with a child.
>>>  So I've changed my goal, just to have an enjoyable life with a child.

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