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How often do you order food to go?

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After work, I always order an ice americano at the cafe near my house.
Drinking coffee is Improving my concentration for study at home.
Thesedays, delivering service is convient and saving time.
But, This service need a some money.
So, when i want to drink something, I am Checking my time first.
If i don't have a time for ordering coffee at a cafe, I always use a delivery service.
And when I went to a Vietnam for travel with my wife, We used a delivery service platform "Grab".
It was pretty nice and Cheaper than Korea platform.

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Hi, Jun! Thank you so much for doing your homework. You did a wonderful job. Please take note of the corrections I made on your sentences. Keep it up and see you in class! ^^
-T. Julia
After work, I always order an ice americano at the cafe near my house.
>> Correct
Drinking coffee is Improving my concentration for study at home.
>> Drinking coffee improves my concentration when studying at home.
Thesedays, delivering service is convient and saving time.
>> These days, delivery services are convenient and save time.
But, This service need a some money.
>> But, this service requires some money.
So, when i want to drink something, I am Checking my time first.
>> So, when I want to drink something, I check the time first.
If i don't have a time for ordering coffee at a cafe, I always use a delivery service.
>> Correct
And when I went to a Vietnam for travel with my wife, We used a delivery service platform "Grab".
>> Correct
It was pretty nice and Cheaper than Korea platform.
>> It was pretty nice and cheaper than platforms in Korea.
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