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Are you good at managing your time? Explain your answer.

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Yes, I am good at managing my time, I plan my schedule for the day times in the morning.
I usually study from 9 am to 2 or 3pm in school and l go to Taekwondo center and come home study.
After finish studying, I watch TV or play games.

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                           Are you good at managing your time? Explain your answer.




Yes, I am good at managing my time, I plan my schedule for the day times in the morning.
>> Yes, I am good at managing my time. I plan my schedule for the daytime in the morning.

I usually study from 9 am to 2 or 3pm in school and l go to Taekwondo center and come home study.
>> I usually study from 9 am to 2 or 3 pm in school then go to the Taekwondo center and come home to study.

After finish studying, I watch TV or play games.
>> OR: After finishing my scheduled activities, I watch TV or play games. 

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