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How do we prevent burnout?

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Burnout has been precisely examined by Herbert Freudenberger in the 1970s. Refering to Herbert description is that a combination of physical, mental, and emotional exhaustion causes different kinds of burnout. Especially, people who is continuously being exposed on the noise or tighten working condition are the biggest proportion of experiencing burnout. It is not only the phenomenon that psychologist has determined on the desk, but also it implies to people these days. In my opinion, to prevent destroying ourselves from burnout, we need to seek out how can we take breaks regularly and maintain a support network. Althoug spending time on the new field is important to expand our professions, recognizing a real figure of mine needs more attention before we lost everything from burnout.

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Hello Mattew,
This is a great composition. Keep it up :)
~ T. Demi ^^

Burnout has been precisely examined by Herbert Freudenberger in the 1970s. Refering to Herbert description is that a combination of physical, mental, and emotional exhaustion causes different kinds of burnout. 
>> Burnout has been precisely examined by Herbert Freudenberger in the 1970s referring to it as a combination of physical, mental, and emotional exhaustion.
Especially, people who is continuously being exposed on the noise or tighten working condition are the biggest proportion of experiencing burnout. 
>>People who are constantly exposed to noise or work in tight conditions are more likely to experience burnout.
It is not only the phenomenon that psychologist has determined on the desk, but also it implies to people these days.
>> Psychologists have not only observed this phenomenon, but it also applies to people nowadays.
 In my opinion, to prevent destroying ourselves from burnout, we need to seek out how can we take breaks regularly and maintain a support network. 
CORRECT!
OR>> In my opinion, to prevent ourselves from being destroyed by burnout, we need to regularly take breaks and maintain a support network.
Althoug spending time on the new field is important to expand our professions, recognizing a real figure of mine needs more attention before we lost everything from burnout.
>> Although spending time in the new field is important to expand our professions, we still have to pay more attention to our bodies before we lose everything from burnout.
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