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Are there any controversies or concerns related to the use of armed police in your country?

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회원님의 영작문

Korea is a country where carrying firearms is prohibited. Only police officers can carry firearms.
Also, gun accidents rarely occur. The gun accident that occurred accidentally was a simple homemade pistol, which has a significantly low lethality capability.
Therefore, there were no concerns or controversies about excessive use of firearms by police in Korea.
Rather, in Korea, there are occasional cases where police officers are injured or, in extreme cases, killed by violent criminals.
Accordingly, public opinion is growing that police officers should be better armed and more actively use firearms for self-defense against violent criminals.
However, the police still do not use firearms except in very special cases.
Meanwhile, looking at gun accidents that frequently occur in the United States, where gun ownership is free, I wonder why the U.S. government does not ban ordinary citizens from carrying guns.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Good evening, Sun! 

Thank you for doing your homework. See you in class tomorrow!

- Kristine ^^ 

Korea is a country where carrying firearms is prohibited. 
>> It is against the law to carry a firearm in Korea.
Only police officers can carry firearms.
>> Correct.
Also, gun accidents rarely occur. 
>> Moreover, gun incidents are extremely rare.
The gun accident that occurred accidentally was a simple homemade pistol, which has a significantly low lethality capability.
>> The gun accident that occurred accidentally involved a simple homemade pistol, which has a significantly low lethality capability.
Therefore, there were no concerns or controversies about excessive use of firearms by police in Korea.
>> Therefore, there were no concerns or controversies about the excessive use of firearms by police in Korea.
Rather, in Korea, there are occasional cases where police officers are injured or, in extreme cases, killed by violent criminals.
>> Instead, violent criminals occasionally cause injuries to police personnel or, in extreme situations, their deaths in Korea.
Accordingly, public opinion is growing that police officers should be better armed and more actively use firearms for self-defense against violent criminals.
>> Correct.
However, the police still do not use firearms except in very special cases.
>> Correct.
Meanwhile, looking at gun accidents that frequently occur in the United States, where gun ownership is free, I wonder why the U.S. government does not ban ordinary citizens from carrying guns.
>> Meanwhile, looking at the gun accidents that frequently occur in the United States, where gun ownership is free, I wonder why the U.S. government does not ban ordinary citizens from carrying guns.
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