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what do you want to include in your
ideal fitness program
- I think that the most important thing to maintain my body is working out regularly.
If you exercies regulaly you can feel satisfied with yourselves and refresh mind.
And I think we need not only aeribic exercise but also weight training.
Because, these help us to maintain our mustles and increase our stamina.


Could you confirm below sentences?
While exercising drinking enough water is very good for staying hydrated
So you should drink water often when you are working out.

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Hi, Sola! Thank you so much for doing your homework. I appreciate it. You did a wonderful job. Please take note of the corrections I made on your sentences. Keep it up and see you in class! ^^
- T. Julia
I think that the most important thing to maintain my body is working out regularly.
>> Correct
If you exercies regulaly you can feel satisfied with yourselves and refresh mind.
>> If you exercise regularly, you can feel satisfied with yourself and refresh your mind
And I think we need not only aeribic exercise but also weight training.
>> Also, I think we need not only aerobic exercise but also weight training.
Because, these help us to maintain our mustles and increase our stamina.
>> These exercises help us maintain our muscles and increase our stamina.


Could you confirm below sentences?
While exercising drinking enough water is very good for staying hydrated
>> Correct
OR >> While exercising, drinking enough water is very good for staying hydrated.
So you should drink water often when you are working out.
>> Correct
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