¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

Homework

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: Á¶*¶ó
2024-04-17 1376

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

what do you want to include in your
ideal fitness program
- I think that the most important thing to maintain my body is working out regularly.
If you exercies regulaly you can feel satisfied with yourselves and refresh mind.
And I think we need not only aeribic exercise but also weight training.
Because, these help us to maintain our mustles and increase our stamina.


Could you confirm below sentences?
While exercising drinking enough water is very good for staying hydrated
So you should drink water often when you are working out.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hi, Sola! Thank you so much for doing your homework. I appreciate it. You did a wonderful job. Please take note of the corrections I made on your sentences. Keep it up and see you in class! ^^
- T. Julia
I think that the most important thing to maintain my body is working out regularly.
>> Correct
If you exercies regulaly you can feel satisfied with yourselves and refresh mind.
>> If you exercise regularly, you can feel satisfied with yourself and refresh your mind
And I think we need not only aeribic exercise but also weight training.
>> Also, I think we need not only aerobic exercise but also weight training.
Because, these help us to maintain our mustles and increase our stamina.
>> These exercises help us maintain our muscles and increase our stamina.


Could you confirm below sentences?
While exercising drinking enough water is very good for staying hydrated
>> Correct
OR >> While exercising, drinking enough water is very good for staying hydrated.
So you should drink water often when you are working out.
>> Correct
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
133319 1. Best place in my country 2. Special food ÀÌ*±Ô ¿Ï·á 2023-12-18 1247
133318 Homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-12-18 1407
133317 Are there any new activities or events you\'re hoping to... ÀÌ*À± ¿Ï·á 2023-12-18 2127
133316 Why do we sometimes need to interact with our colleagues? ¹®*Çö ¿Ï·á 2023-12-18 1974
133315 homework ÃÖ*Ç ¿Ï·á 2023-12-18 1160
133314 What would you do if you had an extra one to two hours in your... ÀÌ*ºó ¿Ï·á 2023-12-18 1393
133313 What comes to your mind whenever you hear the word \'chance\'? ÀÌ*ºó ¿Ï·á 2023-12-18 1846
133312 If you were given a chance what would you choose, to change... Á¤*ȯ ¿Ï·á 2023-12-18 1541
133311 Homework ÀÌ*È­ ¿Ï·á 2023-12-18 1173
133310 Writing Task: What would you like to know about your friends... ÀÓ*Áö ¿Ï·á 2023-12-18 1
133309 Homework ±è*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2023-12-18 1
133308 Imagine you have the opportunity to travel anywhere in the... ¿¡*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2023-12-18 1
133307 Gift ÀÌ*¼Ö ¿Ï·á 2023-12-18 1307
133306 I want to change my face alike jenny ¼­*Áø ¿Ï·á 2023-12-18 1630
133305 HOMEWORK: Please write a short paragraph about \"Is it important... ¾Ù* ¿Ï·á 2023-12-18 1
133304 homework Á¤*È£ ¿Ï·á 2023-12-18 0
133303 HOMEWORK FOR 12/14: Writing Task: Could children be gaslighted... ±è*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2023-12-18 1872
133302 Homework ½Å*È­ ¿Ï·á 2023-12-18 1116
133301 Homework ½Å*È­ ¿Ï·á 2023-12-18 1311
133300 Homework ½Å*È­ ¿Ï·á 2023-12-18 1314

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04