¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

I think there is no end to learning, and the continuation of life is endless self-improvement.

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: À±*Çý
2024-04-17 477

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

Self-improvement is the act of going where it is necessary for one's own development.
Everyone knows nothing when we first come out into the world.
I think it is to be educated at home and in society and to develop personality and intelligence.
We are born without knowing anything from the beginning, and gradually develop knowledge by necessity, receive protection from society, and then go through the process of becoming a member of society.
In this process, I get to know what I like and dislike, and it is also an opportunity to get to know myself better.
Therefore, I think self-improvement is necessary to be full of members of society and myself.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hi Da Hye, 

Your perspective on self-improvement is insightful! You're right; learning is a lifelong journey that helps us understand ourselves better and become valuable members of society. Your thoughtful approach to personal development is inspiring. 

~Teacher Cathy 

 

Self-improvement is the act of going where it is necessary for one's own development. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>Self-improvement involves addressing areas that are essential for one's personal growth. 

Everyone knows nothing when we first come out into the world. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>When we first enter the world, we know nothing. 

I think it is to be educated at home and in society and to develop personality and intelligence. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>I believe that education at home and in society helps to shape our personality and intelligence. 

We are born without knowing anything from the beginning, and gradually develop knowledge by necessity, receive protection from society, and then go through the process of becoming a member of society. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>We start life with no knowledge, gradually acquiring it out of necessity, receiving support from society, and eventually becoming integrated members of it. 

In this process, I get to know what I like and dislike, and it is also an opportunity to get to know myself better. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>We start life with no knowledge, gradually acquiring it out of necessity, receiving support from society, and eventually becoming integrated members of it. 

Therefore, I think self-improvement is necessary to be full of members of society and myself. 

>>CORRECT 

OR>>Therefore, I think self-improvement is crucial for both personal fulfillment and societal contribution. 

 

 

 

 

 

¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
133481 Which celebrity would you like to swap places with? ¿¡*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2023-12-27 2
133480 Homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-12-27 297
133479 Homework 12/22 ±è*¾Æ ¿Ï·á 2023-12-27 1
133478 What do you think is the most dangerous sport? ¹Ú*Çö ¿Ï·á 2023-12-27 417
133477 HOMEWORK: Please write a short paragraph about \"Is it important... ¾Ù* ¿Ï·á 2023-12-27 1
133476 homework Á¤*È£ ¿Ï·á 2023-12-27 0
133475 Is it better to save your allowance or spend it? ÀÓ*È£ ¿Ï·á 2023-12-27 351
133474 Homework : unit 15 ¹Ú*³ª ¿Ï·á 2023-12-27 1
133473 Traditional ways of welcoming the New Year in my family. ±è*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2023-12-27 384
133472 What can you say about your neighbor\'s standard of living? Are... ÀÌ*ÅÂ ¿Ï·á 2023-12-27 339
133471 Is celebrating Christmas important in your family? Why or why... ÀÌ*ÅÂ ¿Ï·á 2023-12-27 549
133470 Trust ÀÌ*±Ô ¿Ï·á 2023-12-27 276
133469 >> What is the best place for a vacation in your country? Why is... ÀÌ*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2023-12-27 6
133468 Are there any specific foods or drinks you believe contribute to... ÀÌ*À± ¿Ï·á 2023-12-27 207
133467 What do you think are the worst fears? ½Å*¼· ¿Ï·á 2023-12-27 303
133466 I don\'t like video game! ¼­*Áø ¿Ï·á 2023-12-27 389
133465 How do you usually celebrate your birthday? À±*¿ø ¿Ï·á 2023-12-27 0
133464 Can you tell me about your favorite movie? À±*¿ø ¿Ï·á 2023-12-26 2
133463 Do you prefer the mountains or the beach? À±*¿ø ¿Ï·á 2023-12-26 0
133462 If you could do one thing to make the world better, what would... À±*¿ø ¿Ï·á 2023-12-26 1

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04