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My point of view about bullying.

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Few years ago, a korean drama, 'The glory', went very viral. It was about a girl who was abused harshly by her school mates becoming a school teacher herself and make a revenge. I believe bullying is not limited to school yet could be taking place anywhere. Life is unfair time to time. So what I need to do is to intent having my own philosophy about life with other people. With that people could have courage to stand up for themselves and the bullies would than know they could fight.

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Hello, Jin!
I watched that Korean drama, and it's good. While everyone has coping mechanisms, I wonder whether getting even when bullied is always essential. In any case, no one should bully anyone and nobody deserves to be the victim of bullying. <3 
Chammy
Few years ago, a korean drama, 'The glory', went very viral. It was about a girl who was abused harshly by her school mates becoming a school teacher herself and make a revenge.
>>A few years ago, a Korean drama, 'The Glory', went very viral. It was about a girl who was abused harshly by her schoolmates became a school teacher herself and taking revenge...
 I believe bullying is not limited to school yet could be taking place anywhere. Life is unfair time to time. 
>>  I believe bullying is not limited to school but could be taking place anywhere. Life is unfair from time to time. 
So what I need to do is to intent having my own philosophy about life with other people. With that people could have courage to stand up for themselves and the bullies would than know they could fight.
>>So what I need to do is to have my own philosophy about life with other people. With that people could have the courage to stand up for themselves and the bullies would then know they could fight.

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