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Three perks of being an introvert.

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There are different kind of people in the world. They have different personalities which are unique and beautiful. In one of those personalities there is an introverted person. They have positive aspects in them.
Firstly, introverts have big hearts. Because they think very much in their spare time, they tendto contemplate deeply about their interests. Often times, introverts have the best knowledge in terms of their interest.
Furthermore, introverts have small range of friends. It¡¯s a hard work for introverts to take part in a big party or meeting with many people. But because of this. They are loyal to their friends and often lasts as a long term relationship.
Lastly, just because introverts don¡¯t talk very much, they tend to benefit from it by not talking unnecessary things that might hurt people.
These are 3 reasons why being an introvert rules.

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Hello, Jin!
I found positivity as I read your composition. I hope you are genuinely doing okay ^_^
Chammy

There are different kind of people in the world. 

>>There are different kinds of people in the world. 

They have different personalities which are unique and beautiful. 

In one of those personalities, there is an introverted person. They have positive aspects in them.
Firstly, introverts have big hearts. Because they think very much in their spare time, they tend to contemplate deeply about their interests. 

Often, introverts have the best knowledge in terms of their interest.

>>Correct.
Furthermore, introverts have small range of friends. It¡¯s a hard work for introverts to take part in a big party or meeting with many people.

>> Furthermore, introverts have a small range of friends. It¡¯s hard work for introverts to take part in a big party or meeting with many people.

 But because of this. They are loyal to their friends and often lasts as a long term relationship.

>> But because of this, they are loyal to their friends and often last as a long-term relationship.

Lastly, just because introverts don¡¯t talk very much, they tend to benefit from it by not talking unnecessary things that might hurt people.

>> Lastly, just because introverts don¡¯t talk very much, they tend to benefit from it by not talking about unnecessary things that might hurt people.

These are 3 reasons why being an introvert rules.

>>Correct.


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