¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

Three perks of being an introvert.

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ÃÖ*
2024-04-16 342

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

There are different kind of people in the world. They have different personalities which are unique and beautiful. In one of those personalities there is an introverted person. They have positive aspects in them.
Firstly, introverts have big hearts. Because they think very much in their spare time, they tendto contemplate deeply about their interests. Often times, introverts have the best knowledge in terms of their interest.
Furthermore, introverts have small range of friends. It¡¯s a hard work for introverts to take part in a big party or meeting with many people. But because of this. They are loyal to their friends and often lasts as a long term relationship.
Lastly, just because introverts don¡¯t talk very much, they tend to benefit from it by not talking unnecessary things that might hurt people.
These are 3 reasons why being an introvert rules.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hello, Jin!
I found positivity as I read your composition. I hope you are genuinely doing okay ^_^
Chammy

There are different kind of people in the world. 

>>There are different kinds of people in the world. 

They have different personalities which are unique and beautiful. 

In one of those personalities, there is an introverted person. They have positive aspects in them.
Firstly, introverts have big hearts. Because they think very much in their spare time, they tend to contemplate deeply about their interests. 

Often, introverts have the best knowledge in terms of their interest.

>>Correct.
Furthermore, introverts have small range of friends. It¡¯s a hard work for introverts to take part in a big party or meeting with many people.

>> Furthermore, introverts have a small range of friends. It¡¯s hard work for introverts to take part in a big party or meeting with many people.

 But because of this. They are loyal to their friends and often lasts as a long term relationship.

>> But because of this, they are loyal to their friends and often last as a long-term relationship.

Lastly, just because introverts don¡¯t talk very much, they tend to benefit from it by not talking unnecessary things that might hurt people.

>> Lastly, just because introverts don¡¯t talk very much, they tend to benefit from it by not talking about unnecessary things that might hurt people.

These are 3 reasons why being an introvert rules.

>>Correct.


¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
134742 Can you remember your dreams? ¼Û*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2024-02-16 698
134741 Homework ±Ç*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2024-02-16 0
134740 Homework ·ù*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2024-02-16 911
134739 Homework ±Ç*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2024-02-16 1
134738 Favorite television program ¼­*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2024-02-16 495
134737 Describe a time when you faced a challenge and how you overcame... ÀÌ*ÅÂ ¿Ï·á 2024-02-16 398
134736 Homework À±*¼± ¿Ï·á 2024-02-16 450
134735 On what occasions do you usually go to an amusement park? ¹Ú*Çö ¿Ï·á 2024-02-16 797
134734 Tell us about a memorable, enjoyable, or strange dream you\'ve... Ȳ*Àº ¿Ï·á 2024-02-16 412
134733 Tell us about a memorable, enjoyable, or strange dream you\'ve... Ȳ*Àº ¿Ï·á 2024-02-16 643
134732 Is it proper to euthanize patients who have \"Sleeping Beauty... Ȳ*Àº ¿Ï·á 2024-02-16 733
134731 Homework do*eun ¿Ï·á 2024-02-16 380
134730 Which one do you think is more difficult, lose your sight or... ÀÓ*È£ ¿Ï·á 2024-02-16 0
134729 What do you think is the worst social problem? ½Å*¼· ¿Ï·á 2024-02-16 480
134728 What are the effects of loving to read? ÀÓ*È£ ¿Ï·á 2024-02-16 2
134727 Some people think video games are a waste of time. What do you... ÀÓ*È£ ¿Ï·á 2024-02-16 0
134726 What Korean tradition do you like most? ÀÓ*È£ ¿Ï·á 2024-02-16 0
134725 WRITING TASK: What do you enjoy eating with your friends? ÀÓ*Áö ¿Ï·á 2024-02-16 3
134724 Catch up the fashion ÀÓ*Áø ¿Ï·á 2024-02-16 486
134723 Advise ¿°*¿¹ ¿Ï·á 2024-02-16 1

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04