¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

Three perks of being an introvert.

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ÃÖ*
2024-04-16 314

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

There are different kind of people in the world. They have different personalities which are unique and beautiful. In one of those personalities there is an introverted person. They have positive aspects in them.
Firstly, introverts have big hearts. Because they think very much in their spare time, they tendto contemplate deeply about their interests. Often times, introverts have the best knowledge in terms of their interest.
Furthermore, introverts have small range of friends. It¡¯s a hard work for introverts to take part in a big party or meeting with many people. But because of this. They are loyal to their friends and often lasts as a long term relationship.
Lastly, just because introverts don¡¯t talk very much, they tend to benefit from it by not talking unnecessary things that might hurt people.
These are 3 reasons why being an introvert rules.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hello, Jin!
I found positivity as I read your composition. I hope you are genuinely doing okay ^_^
Chammy

There are different kind of people in the world. 

>>There are different kinds of people in the world. 

They have different personalities which are unique and beautiful. 

In one of those personalities, there is an introverted person. They have positive aspects in them.
Firstly, introverts have big hearts. Because they think very much in their spare time, they tend to contemplate deeply about their interests. 

Often, introverts have the best knowledge in terms of their interest.

>>Correct.
Furthermore, introverts have small range of friends. It¡¯s a hard work for introverts to take part in a big party or meeting with many people.

>> Furthermore, introverts have a small range of friends. It¡¯s hard work for introverts to take part in a big party or meeting with many people.

 But because of this. They are loyal to their friends and often lasts as a long term relationship.

>> But because of this, they are loyal to their friends and often last as a long-term relationship.

Lastly, just because introverts don¡¯t talk very much, they tend to benefit from it by not talking unnecessary things that might hurt people.

>> Lastly, just because introverts don¡¯t talk very much, they tend to benefit from it by not talking about unnecessary things that might hurt people.

These are 3 reasons why being an introvert rules.

>>Correct.


¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
135204 Was I rude in the subway? ±è*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2024-03-04 647
135203 homework 03.04 ÃÖ*Ç ¿Ï·á 2024-03-04 639
135202 Homework ±è*¿ø ¿Ï·á 2024-03-04 419
135201 2023.03Á¦.4 ¼÷Á¦ ¾ç*À² ¿Ï·á 2024-03-04 2
135200 Homework ±è*¼­ ¿Ï·á 2024-03-04 1
135199 Homework ÀÌ*Çý ¿Ï·á 2024-03-04 1
135198 Are you afraid of a snake? ¼Û*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2024-03-04 492
135197 What do you like about traveling ½Å*±Ô ¿Ï·á 2024-03-04 629
135196 homework ÀÌ*¼÷ ¿Ï·á 2024-03-04 414
135195 Compare living with roommates with living alone. Which living... ÃÖ*ÈÆ ¿Ï·á 2024-03-04 764
135194 What other training do you have about airlines? õ*Àº ¿Ï·á 2024-03-04 341
135193 HOMEWORK: Please write a short paragraph about \"Do you want... ¾Ù* ¿Ï·á 2024-03-04 0
135192 letter ÀÓ*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2024-03-04 604
135191 What fun things do you enjoy doing when you\'re on vacation?... ¿¡*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2024-03-04 1
135190 The best ¹Î*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2024-03-04 16
135189 What do you find most challenging about graduate studies? ¹Ú*Àº ¿Ï·á 2024-03-04 696
135188 homework ÇÑ*¿µ ¿Ï·á 2024-03-04 1
135187 Price is the only consideration when buying something ÀÓ*¼± ¿Ï·á 2024-03-04 726
135186 Homework ·ù*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2024-03-04 499
135185 Which building is the taller, Lotte World Tower or Haeundae LCT... Â÷*Çõ ¿Ï·á 2024-03-04 824

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04