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What I did last weekend

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last weekend, My parents and I went to the exhibition of cars.
In order to get information about the Santafe Car.
Well, the car has many functions like auto drive system, Parking system and even air fittering machine.
It was so great.
So, We decided to buy the car after riding car experience.]
And Last saturday I went to wedding hall to celebrate my friend who married.
I wonderful and I really wished that she will be more happier than now.

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last weekend, My parents and I went to the exhibition of cars. In order to get information about the Santafe Car.
>> Last weekend, my parents and I went to the car exhibition to get information about the Santa Fe car.
Well, the car has many functions like auto drive system, Parking system and even air fittering machine.
>> Well, the car has many functions like an auto-drive system, a parking system, and even an air filtering machine.
It was so great. So, We decided to buy the car after riding car experience.
>> It was so great, so we decided to buy the car after the test drive.
And Last saturday I went to wedding hall to celebrate my friend who married.
>> Last Saturday, I went to the wedding hall to celebrate my friend's wedding.
I wonderful and I really wished that she will be more happier than now.
>> I felt wonderful, and I sincerely wished that she would be even happier than she is now.
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