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2024-04-09 1908

회원님의 영작문

I believe that the most important quality for a game player is the experience of gameplay. There are two main reasons for this: enhancing understanding of both internal and external aspects of games. Firstly, actually playing games makes it easier to understand the internal systems of games. Understanding internal game system allows to understand about the business part of the industry also. For instance, understanding the monetization elements within a game and how content leads to purchasing intentions is crucial for devising business model strategies. This understanding naturally extends to an understanding of the external aspects of games and the gaming industry as a whole. Being a game player allows one to have an interest in new releases, acquire knowledge of where to find information and evaluations of them, and naturally learn which elements of a game garner positive reviews and what genres and games are currently dominant in the gaming market.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Eugene!
This answer effectively highlights the significance of gameplay experience. You effectively did that with transition between points and providing more examples to illustrate your argument. Overall, this would make a great response!
~ Teacher Maxine 

I believe that the most important quality for a game player is the experience of gameplay. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I firmly believe that gameplay experience is the most crucial quality for a game player

There are two main reasons for this: enhancing understanding of both internal and external aspects of games. 
>> CORRECT!

Firstly, actually playing games makes it easier to understand the internal systems of games. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Firstly, playing games directly facilitates a deeper understanding of their internal systems.

Understanding internal game system allows to understand about the business part of the industry also. 
>> Understanding internal game systems allows one to understand the business aspects of the industry as well.

For instance, understanding the monetization elements within a game and how content leads to purchasing intentions is crucial for devising business model strategies. 
>> CORRECT!

This understanding naturally extends to an understanding of the external aspects of games and the gaming industry as a whole. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> This understanding naturally extends to encompass the external aspects of games and the gaming industry as a whole.

Being a game player allows one to have an interest in new releases, acquire knowledge of where to find information and evaluations of them, and naturally learn which elements of a game garner positive reviews and what genres and games are currently dominant in the gaming market.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Being a gamer fosters interest in new releases, knowledge acquisition about where to find information and evaluations, and a natural understanding of elements that garner positive reviews and dominate the gaming market.
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