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There is Hangang in Yeouido. I went to the there with my friend.
When we arrived in Yeouinaru station, there are so many peoples.
A lot of peoples took a picture with the cherry blossoms or they enjoyed on the mat around the river.
So when I took a picture, I cannot help taking picture with other peoples.
Because just there are a lot of peoples.
We also rented a mat and than we ate cup-noodle for lunch on the mat.
We took a few videos and pictures or we had the time to relax.
Some peoples gave snack to seabirds next to river. So I also tried it. It was a little scared But It was fun.
We ate chicken for dinner at evening. We thought it would take a long time
But the chicken made in 15 minutes. It was good trip for me!

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Hi Su,

This was indeed a wonderful trip. I am glad you had a relaxing time with your friend. Talk to you later! ^^


-Teacher Ash


There is Hangang in Yeouido. I went to the there with my friend.

>> There is a river in Yeouido called "Hanggang".

When we arrived in Yeouinaru station, there are so many peoples.

>>When we arrived in Yeouinaru station, there were so many people.

A lot of peoples took a picture with the cherry blossoms or they enjoyed on the mat around the river.

>>A lot of people took a picture of the cherry blossoms. They also enjoyed sitting on the mat around the river.

So when I took a picture, I cannot help taking picture with other peoples.

>> So, when I took a picture, I cannot help but include people in my photos.

Because just there are a lot of peoples.

>> It is because there are just a lot of people.

We also rented a mat and than we ate cup-noodle for lunch on the mat.

>>We also rented a mat where we ate a cup of noodle for lunch. 

We took a few videos and pictures or we had the time to relax.

>>We took a few videos and pictures while relaxing. 

Some peoples gave snack to seabirds next to river. 

>>Some people gave snacks to seabirds. 

So I also tried it. 

>> So, I also tried it. 

It was a little scared But It was fun.

>>It was a little scary, but it was fun. 

We ate chicken for dinner at evening. 

>>We ate chicken for dinner in the evening. 

We thought it would take a long time But the chicken made in 15 minutes.

>> We thought it would take a long time, but it was cook in 15 minutes.

It was good trip for me!

>>CORRECT



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