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My parent\'s advice

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I remember my father's advice vividly. When I lost an important race and was disappointed at the fact that next morning I faced my friends and teachers, my dad came over to me and consoled me saying that over time I am going to face many successes and failures at the same time. He said that this failure would make you have the power to deal with some failures. At that time I was a senior of high school. Decades of years have passed,but I have kept my father's advice deep in mind. So I am not afraid of failing or missing anything.

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Hi, Gi Yean!
The advice that you received from your father was really great and motivating. It's nice that he made you understand at a young age that failure is a part of life and that each failure can make you stronger as a person. Thank you for sharing it with me! 
- T. Caitlyn
I remember my father's advice vividly. 
>> CORRECT
When I lost an important race and was disappointed at the fact that next morning I faced my friends and teachers, my dad came over to me and consoled me saying that over time I am going to face many successes and failures at the same time. 
>> When I lost an important race and felt disappointed at the fact that the next morning, I had to face my friends and teachers, my dad came over to me and consoled me, saying that over time I would experience both successes and failures.
He said that this failure would make you have the power to deal with some failures. 
>> He said that this failure would give me the strength to deal with future failures.
At that time I was a senior of high school. 
>> At that time, I was a senior in high school.
Decades of years have passed,but I have kept my father's advice deep in mind. 
>> CORRECT
So I am not afraid of failing or missing anything.
>> CORRECT
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