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Why is it important to rest and relax during a long weekend?

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Commonly it is important to rest because we can get some energy to start a new day. When it comes to long holidays, it is a chance to break the rhythm of everyday life and go into deeper rest. So I guess relaxing during a long weekend is important.

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Hi Seong Eun,

I wanted to drop you a quick note to say how impressed I am with your homework! You did a fantastic job explaining why it's important to rest and relax during long weekends. You nailed it when you said that resting gives us the energy we need for each day. And you're absolutely right that long weekends are a chance to take a break from our usual routines and really unwind. Keep up the awesome work! 

 

Commonly it is important to rest because we can get some energy to start a new day.

>>CORRECT

OR>>Commonly, it is important to rest because we can gather energy to start a new day.

When it comes to long holidays, it is a chance to break the rhythm of everyday life and go into deeper rest.

>>CORRECT

OR>>When it comes to long holidays, it is a chance to break the rhythm of everyday life and enter into deeper rest.

So I guess relaxing during a long weekend is important.

>>CORRECT

OR>>So, I believe that relaxing during a long weekend is important.

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