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Q: What are the possible disadvantages of allowing phones to be used during classes?
A: I think one of the disadvantages of using phones is keeping students away from concentrating.
There's actually so many factors of keeping students away from studying, so it could just cut there grades down.
Also, it can disturb students studying.

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Hi, Paul!

Thank you for answering your homework.

~T. Divina^^

Here are some notes:

1. I think one of the disadvantages of using phones is keeping students away from concentrating.
>>CORRECT!

2. There's actually so many factors of keeping students away from studying, so it could just cut there grades down.
>>There are actually so many factors of keeping students away from studying, so it could just cut their grades down.

3. Also, it can disturb students studying.
>>Also, it can disturb students who are studying.

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