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Why are some people pessimists?

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For my opinion, pessimistic people are made by their experiences, not just naturally born.
We experience many things during living, even though that is bad or good.
Pessimistic people tend to think deeply on the situation and think like pros and cons, consequence.
They want to achieve the best results, and that why some people are pessimists.

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Hello, Rachel!

It is great to have you back here on the composition page! This time, let us hone your skills more intensively so that you can use them for your future career endeavors.

I totally agree with your ideas. Pessimists can measure and calculate the risks and sometimes go beyond their worries and overact about them. In this way, it may seem negative since they see the dark side of situations. However, if they do not acknowledge the bad side of things, it may also blind them from achieving a clear goal- this may be the downfall of an over optimist.

Nevertheless, a balance of optimism and pessimism is the best combination to live life better.

Take a look at the underscored grammar suggestions below. They are on diction, the determiner 'the', and the linking very 'is". Overall, you did great on this task. Carry on!

See you tomorrow!

-T. Donna~

For my opinion, pessimistic people are made by their experiences, not just naturally born.
>> Correct!

We experience many things during living, even though that is bad or good.
>> We experience many things while living, even though that is bad or good.

Pessimistic people tend to think deeply on the situation and think like pros and cons, consequence.
>> Pessimistic people tend to think deeply on the situation and think about the pros and cons.

They want to achieve the best results, and that why some people are pessimists.
>>  They want to achieve the best results, and that is why some people are pessimists.
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