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What position would you avoid playing in soccer?

작성자: 박*호
2024-04-04 1364

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Soccer positions are largely divided into attackers and defenders.
And since soccer is a game in which the team that scores the most goals wins, excellent players play as attackers.
It is also important for defenders to block the opposing team's attacks well to avoid conceding goals.
However, because attackers who score goals are considered more important and receive cheers from many spectators, all players want to play as attackers.
In particular, the frontline striker who scores goals is selected among the best players of the team.
However, I want to avoid playing as a frontline striker, which is what every player wants to do.
That's because I don't have the quality to be a frontline striker and I don't have the mental strength to get the pressure of having to score a goal and the criticism when I fail to score.
I have relatively strong endurance, so I think a defender would be a good position for me.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hey there, Sun!

Thank you so much for taking your time to do your homework. I appreciate it so much!

- Kristine ^^ 

Soccer positions are largely divided into attackers and defenders.
>> Correct. 
And since soccer is a game in which the team that scores the most goals wins, 
>> Furthermore, since soccer is a team sport, the team with the most goals wins.
excellent players play as attackers.
>> Great athletes take the offensive position.
It is also important for defenders to block the opposing team's attacks well to avoid conceding goals.
>> Correct. 
However, because attackers who score goals are considered more important and receive cheers from many spectators, all players want to play as attackers.
>> Correct. 
In particular, the frontline striker who scores goals is selected among the best players of the team.
>> Correct. 
Or >> One of the team's best players is chosen specifically to be the front-line striker who scores goals.
However, I want to avoid playing as a frontline striker, which is what every player wants to do.
>> All players want to play as frontline strikers, but that's not what I want to do.
That's because I don't have the quality to be a frontline striker and I don't have the mental strength to get the pressure of having to score a goal and the criticism when I fail to score.
>> Correct. 
I have relatively strong endurance, so I think a defender would be a good position for me.
>> Correct. 

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