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I\'m anxious because I\'m not perfect.

작성자: 윤*혜
2024-04-03 414

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I think the strongest feeling I have is anxiety.
I'm anxious that my surroundings will be sick or hurt, I feel anxious about my future and present, and I have a lot of anxiety inside even though I'm laughing and playing well.
I think I have anxious feelings because I'm not perfect.
Of course, I don't think there's a perfect human being on Earth.
But at least if I try now, I believe that I should get a better return or a happier future should be drawn later on.
So I'm going to have to do more to relieve this feeling.
I will study so that I don't feel anxious and get a certificate and fix my bad lifestyle little by little.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello Da Hye,

Thank you for doing your homework, and I want to acknowledge the courage it took to share your feelings of anxiety. It's not easy to open up about such emotions, and I admire your honesty and vulnerability. I hear you when you say that anxiety surrounds you, causing worry about your surroundings, future, and even your present moments. It's understandable to feel this way, especially when striving for perfection, which, as you rightly pointed out, is an impossible standard. Remember, imperfection is what makes us human, and there's beauty in embracing our flaws and growing from them. Your willingness to recognize areas where you can improve shows strength and self-awareness. As your teacher, I want to reassure you that you're not alone in this journey. I’m here to support you every step of the way. Together, we can work on strategies to manage your anxiety, whether it's through studying or self-care practices. Keep in mind that progress takes time, and every effort you make towards relieving your anxiety is a step in the right direction. Believe in yourself and your ability to overcome challenges. You're capable of achieving great things, and I'm confident that with determination and perseverance, you'll pave the way to a brighter, happier future. Take care and remember to be kind to yourself. I’m rooting for you!

~Teacher Cathy

 

I think the strongest feeling I have is anxiety.
>>CORRECT
OR>>I believe that the most intense emotion I experience is anxiety.

I'm anxious that my surroundings will be sick or hurt, I feel anxious about my future and present, and I have a lot of anxiety inside even though I'm laughing and playing well.
>>CORRECT
OR>>I feel anxious about the health and well-being of those around me, about my current and future situations, and even when I am seemingly happy and engaged in activities.

I think I have anxious feelings because I'm not perfect.
>>CORRECT
OR>>I think my anxiety stems from my imperfections.

Of course, I don't think there's a perfect human being on Earth.
>>CORRECT
OR>>Certainly, I don't expect anyone to be perfect.

But at least if I try now, I believe that I should get a better return or a happier future should be drawn later on.
>>CORRECT
OR>>However, I believe that if I make efforts now, I can achieve better outcomes and a happier future later on.

So I'm going to have to do more to relieve this feeling.
>>CORRECT
OR>>Therefore, I must take proactive steps to alleviate this feeling of anxiety.

I will study so that I don't feel anxious and get a certificate and fix my bad lifestyle little by little.
>>I will study so that I don't feel anxious get a certificate and fix my bad lifestyle little by little.

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