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Whenever I hear or saw the news about crime especially about the woman, I reconsider living alone. Because I don't want to be nervous or intimidated when I'm on my way to home or open the door thinking about someone in my house. Unfortunately, I think it is very hard to down the crime rate sharply.

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Whenever I hear or saw the news about crime especially about the woman, I reconsider living alone. Because I don't want to be nervous or intimidated when I'm on my way to home or open the door thinking about someone in my house. 
>> Whenever I hear or see the news about crime, especially involving women, I reconsider living alone because I don't want to be nervous or intimidated when I am on my way home or open the door thinking that someone broke into my house.

Unfortunately, I think it is very hard to down the crime rate sharply.
>> Unfortunately, I think reducing the crime rate sharply would take a lot of effort and manpower. 
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