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In Korea, the roots of Confucian culture that respects the elders remain in the food culture.

First, an adult holds a spoon, and then the lower person can hold the spoon, and then the adult starts eating and then the lower person starts eating.
Next, even if the person underneath finishes eating, they should not get up from the table until the adult finishes eating.
the lower person can't talk loudly while eating and can't make chewing sounds.
Also, they need to be careful not to make the sound of the spoon hitting the bowl.
These things apply equally not only in the house but also in the workplace.
When I was very young, before my father ate, my immature youngest brother first took a spoon in the food and was scolded.
For now, you can ask for the understanding of adults and get up first at the table during a meal or speak loudly during a meal.
However, meal etiquette is still important in Korea.
In particular, compliance with meal etiquette in work life is very important.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hey there, Sun!

Thank you for doing your homework. Keep up the good work!

- Kristine ^^ 

In Korea, the roots of Confucian culture that respects the elders remain in the food culture.
>> The Korean cuisine culture mainly reflects the foundations of Confucianism, that emphasizes respect for elders.
First, an adult holds a spoon, and then the lower person can hold the spoon, and then the adult starts eating and then the lower person starts eating.
>> The oldest person holds the spoon first, followed by the youngest. After that, the adult starts eating, and then the youngest.
Next, even if the person underneath finishes eating, they should not get up from the table until the adult finishes eating.
>> Next, they should wait for the adult to finish eating before getting up from the table.
the lower person can't talk loudly while eating and can't make chewing sounds.
>> The youngest person can't chew or eat loudly while eating.
Also, they need to be careful not to make the sound of the spoon hitting the bowl.
>> They must also use caution so as not to create any sound of the spoon hitting the bowl.
These things apply equally not only in the house but also in the workplace.
>> These rules are applicable in both the home and the workplace.
When I was very young, before my father ate, my immature youngest brother first took a spoon in the food and was scolded.
>> When I was very young, my younger brother got in trouble for taking a spoonful of food before my father even started eating.
For now, you can ask for the understanding of adults and get up first at the table during a meal or speak loudly during a meal.
>> Nowadays, you are allowed to speak up at meals or get up first at the table with the grownups approval.
However, meal etiquette is still important in Korea.
>> However, table manners are still highly valued in Korea.
In particular, compliance with meal etiquette in work life is very important.
>> Specifically, it is essential to follow food etiquette in the workplace.
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