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I am easily frightened when something happens around me.
It is better to make a little money than to make a lot of money with price of dangerous chores.
But If I am in a big trouble l can¡¯t believe what I would make a choice.

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Hi, Ms. Sunny!
Agree with you, people are motivated to do dangerous tasks because they badly need it. By the way, your sentence construction is improving, keep it up! Thank you for always doing your homework~
Aki~

I am easily frightened when something happens around me.
>>>CORRECT!

It is better to make a little money than to make a lot of money with price of dangerous chores.
>>>  It is better to make a little money than to make a lot of money in exchange for dangerous chores.

But If I am in a big trouble l can¡¯t believe what I would make a choice.
>>> But If I am in big trouble l can¡¯t believe what I would make a choice.
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