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In my opinion, I agree that. I know a quote about 'difficult time' from the film 'Vanilla Sky'.The quote is 'The sweet is never as sweet without the sour'. Like this quote, a hard time makes your heart strong and it will help in future.
When I was 15 years old. My father bought bike for me. However, back then, I had never ridden a bike in my life time. so I have no choice but practice. On Sunday morning, I took my bike to school playground and tried to ride it. For few hours, I fell off the bike so may times. Even the rain pours, I never gave up.
During the practice. I learned how to not fall off from a bike by my failure. It helped my hard work paid off. In other words I got a lot better at cycling. The hard times helped me to master cycling.
Like my experience. The difficult time will become your asset, and it will help your future.

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Hi there Se Hun~!^^ Thanks for doing your homework! Actually, I get questions from IELTS Writing Task 2. Enjoy your practice! See you tomorrow!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
In my opinion, I agree that. 
>>>I agree with it.
I know a quote about a 'difficult time' from the film 'Vanilla Sky'.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
The quote is 'The sweet is never as sweet without the sour'. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Like this quote, a hard time makes your heart strong and it will help in the future.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
When I was 15 years old, my father bought a bike for me. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
However, back then, I had never ridden a bike in my life time.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 so I have no choice but practice.
>>> So I had no choice but practice.
 On Sunday morning, I took my bike to school playground and tried to ride it.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 For few hours, I fell off the bike so may times. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Even the rain pours, I've never given up.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
During the practice. I learned how to not fall off from a bike by my failure.
>>> While practicing, I've learned how not to fall off from the bike.
It helped my hard work paid off.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 In other words I got a lot better at cycling.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 The hard times helped me to master cycling.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 Like my experience, the difficult time will become your asset, and it will help your future.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
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