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Do you wish it rain more or rain less where you live? Why?

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I apply it on rainy days to hope for little rain, but it doesn't matter if it doesn't rain.
It's because on rainy days, it doesn't feel very good because it rains, but on days when it doesn't rain, if it comes, you can get rid of the fine dust, and if it doesn't, you can play outside a lot, so you can come or not.
if it will rain, it is better to come a little.

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Hi Sunny!
Take note of the corrections below.
The sentences were a little complicated and unclear.
I tried sorting out your words below.
Take a look and we'll discuss on Monday.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I apply it on rainy days to hope for little rain, but it doesn't matter if it doesn't rain.
>> I wish it on rainy days hoping for little rain, but it doesn't matter if it doesn't rain.
It's because on rainy days, it doesn't feel very good because it rains, but on days when it doesn't rain, if it comes, you can get rid of the fine dust, 
>> It's because on rainy days, it doesn't feel good but we can get rid of fine dust.
and if it doesn't, you can play outside a lot, so you can come or not.
>> However, on days when it doesn't rain, we can play outside a lot.
if it will rain, it is better to come a little.
>> So, I like it when there is only a soft shower. 
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