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One of the most common ways to lose weight is to reduce the amount of food you eat. However, excessive dietary restrictions can cause harm to your health. Another common way to lose weight is by exercising. However, when overdone, it can also have an adverse effect on our bodies and minds. One of the most common mistakes of dieting is by eating insufficient nutrients. Our bodies need various nutrients, and a lack of these essential nutrients can put our health at risk.

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Hi Mia! Thank you for writing your homework. Indeed, we need to ensure that we are getting the essential nutrients every day, even when we are on a diet. Well done! 
-Khai

One of the most common ways to lose weight is to reduce the amount of food you eat. 

>> CORRECT

OR

>> Reducing the amount of food you eat is one of the most common ways to lose weight.

However, excessive dietary restrictions can cause harm to your health. 

>> CORRECT

Another common way to lose weight is by exercising. 

>> CORRECT
OR

>> In addition, exercising is a common way to lose weight.

However, when overdone, it can also have an adverse effect on our bodies and minds. 

>> CORRECT

OR

>> But when it is overdone, it can have a negative effect on our bodies and minds.

One of the most common mistakes of dieting is by eating insufficient nutrients. 

>> One of the most common mistakes in dieting is eating insufficient nutrients.

Our bodies need various nutrients, and a lack of these essential nutrients can put our health at risk.

>> CORRECT

OR

>> Our bodies need various vitamins and minerals, and a lack of these can put our health at risk.


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