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Where I would like to stay during retirement

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2024-03-28 1219

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At first, as my parents will be still alive during retirement, I would like to stay in the province.
I have lived in the province because of our family business, farming, so I don't have any resistance to stay in the province.
It is also one of the reason that I don't intend to get married yet.

But, after my parents pass away, I would like to stay in the city.
I have a plan to purchase a my own house in forties.
If I put this plan into action, I can live independently with my family in the city.
As I have no plan to marriage now, I think It is more easier to go to the hospital, find a job, and make new friend than living in the province.

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Hi Min! Thank you for writing your homework. I¡¯m impressed with your answer. I think you have a clear idea of what path you would like to take in the future. Well done!
-Khai 
At first, as my parents will be still alive during retirement, I would like to stay in the province.
>> At first, as my parents will still be alive during retirement, I would like to stay in the province.
I have lived in the province because of our family business, farming, so I don't have any resistance to stay in the province.
>> I have lived in the province because of our family business, farming, so I don't have any resistance to staying in the province.
It is also one of the reason that I don't intend to get married yet.

>> It is also one of the reasons that I don't intend to get married yet.

But, after my parents pass away, I would like to stay in the city.

>> But after my parents pass away, I would like to stay in the city.

I have a plan to purchase a my own house in forties.

>> I have a plan to purchase my own house in my forties.

If I put this plan into action, I can live independently with my family in the city.

>> CORRECT

As I have no plan to marriage now, I think It is more easier to go to the hospital, find a job, and make new friend than living in the province.
>> As I have no plan to get married now, I think it is easier to go to the hospital, find a job, and make new friends than to live in the province.
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