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When it comes to an ideal vacation, people say, go to places with good view with their families or have active experiences and have a good time.
It also refers to go to travel.
But Korea can't have an ideal vacation as they say.
This is because summer vacation and winter vacation are shorter than I thought.
It's a month at the most, but during that time, most family can't go anywhere on time.
And most families try to make up for their lack of study skills during that time, or are proceeded with studying ahead of other students.
That's why students spend more time going to academies and studying during vacation.
Considering that I also had those experience, I can say that the ideal vacation I think is to do nothing and just rest at home.
It's just a life of watching movies and dramas that I've postponed while eating well and sleeping well, not studying or exercising at home.

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Hello, Yun!
You must be exhausted from studying a lot for the tests the reason why you'd rather relax at home than do outdoor activities... In that case, I hope you get the rest you deserve~ 
Chammy
When it comes to an ideal vacation, people say, go to places with good view with their families or have active experiences and have a good time.
>>When it comes to an ideal vacation, people say, to go to places with good views with their families or have active experiences and have a good time.
It also refers to go to travel.
>>It also refers to going to travel.
But Korea can't have an ideal vacation as they say.
This is because summer vacation and winter vacation are shorter than I thought.
>>Correct
It's a month at the most, but during that time, most family can't go anywhere on timeviews.
>>It's a month-long, but during that time, most families can't go anywhere.
And most families try to make up for their lack of study skills during that time or are proceeded with studying ahead of other students.
>>Most families try to make up for their lack of study skills during that time or are proceeding with studying ahead of other students.
That's why students spend more time going to academies and studying during vacations.
Considering that I also had those experiences, I can say that the ideal vacation I think is to do nothing and just rest at home.
It's just a life of watching movies and dramas that I've postponed while eating well and sleeping well, not studying or exercising at home.
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