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영작교정 게시판

영어 말하기와 쓰기를 동시에 잡는다!

자신 있게 쓸 수 있는 영작문을 위해 파워잉글리쉬 수업을 수강하시는
회원님들께 무료로 제공해드리는 부가 서비스로, 전문 분야를 제외한 자유 주제
또는 강사님이 내주시는 과제를 회원님께서 영어로 작성해주시면,
담당 강사 님께서 ‘문법 오류 교정’ 과 ‘더 나은 영어식 표현’으로 교정해주는
서비스 입니다.

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작성자: 나*진
2024-03-27 251

회원님의 영작문

Due to words limit, I will just put an answer of Q1, and tell the other parts in the class!

I believe I would like to work with your company because it has a stable track record of performance and shows potential for future growth. Neople has maintained stable revenue over a long period through Dungeon & Fighter, establishing itself as a key driver of Nexon's overall revenue. Building on this stability, Neople has successfully launched Dungeon & Fighter Mobile using the same IP, demonstrating the experience and expertise to make future projects successful. Furthermore, the release of console and PC games targeting untapped markets like North America and Europe, rather than the saturated mobile market, showcases Neople's business expansion capabilities. I hope to contribute my experience and skills to drive results and find fulfillment in the company, thus enabling both myself and the company to grow together.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Your response effectively demonstrates a deep understanding of Neople's successful track record in the gaming industry, hence, showing your keen interest in contributing to the company's growth by emphasizing your desire to leverage your experience and skills to drive results. This aligns well with Neople's business expansion goals and expresses your proactive approach to mutual growth and success within the company. Well done on providing a detailed and thoughtful answer!
~ Teacher Maxine

I believe I would like to work with your company because it has a stable track record of performance and shows potential for future growth. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I believe that I would like to work with your company due to its consistent track record of performance and its potential for future growth.

Neople has maintained stable revenue over a long period through Dungeon & Fighter, establishing itself as a key driver of Nexon's overall revenue. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Neople has maintained a stable revenue stream over an extended period through Dungeon & Fighter, establishing itself as a crucial driver of Nexon's overall revenue.

Building on this stability, Neople has successfully launched Dungeon & Fighter Mobile using the same IP, demonstrating the experience and expertise to make future projects successful. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Expanding on this stability, Neople has successfully launched Dungeon & Fighter Mobile using the same IP, showcasing their experience and expertise in ensuring the success of future projects.

Furthermore, the release of console and PC games targeting untapped markets like North America and Europe, rather than the saturated mobile market, showcases Neople's business expansion capabilities. 
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Moreover, the company's release of console and PC games targeting untapped markets like North America and Europe, rather than the saturated mobile market, highlights Neople's capacity for business expansion.

I hope to contribute my experience and skills to drive results and find fulfillment in the company, thus enabling both myself and the company to grow together.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I aim to contribute my experience and skills to drive positive results and find personal fulfillment within the company, thus fostering mutual growth for both myself and the company.

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첨삭이 가능하며,

올려주신 글의 강사님 첨삭은 24시간 이내에
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