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HOMEWORK: What do you think about putting in effort but no progress?

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it's soun is very sad.

putting in effort is not able to see rsults right away.

but ontinuously doning putting in effort, you'll good results.

you may fail, but you putting in effort, you won't regret it.

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Hello, Eve!
Even though it was not grammatically correct, I understood and agreed with your idea! :)) Failure is already a part of the process, but doing something without giving our best try doubles the regrets.  
Chammy
it's soun is very sad.
>> It sounds so sad. 
putting in effort is not able to see rsults right away.
>>Putting in effort doesn't mean to see the results right away.
but ontinuously doning putting in effort, you'll good results.
>> But putting in constant effort could give good results.
you may fail, but you putting in effort, you won't regret it.
>> You may fail, but you won't regret anything if you put in effort. 
OR
>> If you exert effort, you won't regret anything, even if you don't succeed. 
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