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what are public toilets like in your country ?

작성자: 박*호
2024-03-27 2013

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People who have traveled to Europe may be very surprised at how few public toilets there are, which are dirty and not free.
Travelers also have to pay to use restrooms in restaurants or department stores.
Unlike Europe, public toilets in Korea are everywhere, clean, and free.
One of the things that travelers to Korea like about Korea is its clean toilets.
Until the 1970s in Korea, public toilets were not flush.
Then, in the 1980s, the Korean economy developed remarkably, and with the hosting of the 1986 Asian Games and the 1988 Olympics, the government led the increase in the number of public toilets and changed them to flush toilets.
Recently, public toilets have been changed to be more female-friendly.
Public restrooms used to have an equal number of toilets for men and women, but the number of toilets for women is increasing in consideration of women's long toilet using time.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hey there, Sun! 

Did yoi know, in public restrooms, the first toilet cubicle is always the least used. It also means it is always the cleanest. Only 80% of people wash their hands after using the toilet, and only 30% of those who do wash choose to use soap. Only 5% of people wash their hands for the recommended minimum of 15 seconds.

- Kristine ^^ 

People who have traveled to Europe may be very surprised at how few public toilets there are, which are dirty and not free.
>> Those who have never been to Europe would be surprised to find out how few unclean, pay restrooms there are.
Travelers also have to pay to use restrooms in restaurants or department stores.
>> Correct. 
Or >> In addition, travelers must pay to use the restroom in restaurants or department stores.
Unlike Europe, public toilets in Korea are everywhere, clean, and free.
>> In comparison to Europe, Korea has plenty of free, clean public restrooms.
One of the things that travelers to Korea like about Korea is its clean toilets.
>> Clean toilets are one of the factors that attract tourists to Korea.
Until the 1970s in Korea, public toilets were not flush.
>> In Korea, public restrooms were not flushed until the 1970s.
Then, in the 1980s, the Korean economy developed remarkably, and with the hosting of the 1986 Asian Games and the 1988 Olympics, the government led the increase in the number of public toilets and changed them to flush toilets.
>> Correct. 
Recently, public toilets have been changed to be more female-friendly.
>> The design of public restrooms has recently been updated to better accommodate women.
Public restrooms used to have an equal number of toilets for men and women, but the number of toilets for women is increasing in consideration of women's long toilet using time.
>> There used to be an equal number of male and female restrooms but due to women's prolonged use of the toilet, there are now more restrooms available for women.
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