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How does smiling about past events help us feel better? Discuss in 3 to 5 sentences.

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I hope so. I think negativities about our past won't help at all. If we made vile errors and mistakes, we should take it as positively as possible for days ahead and try to learn a lesson for the brighter future. As if something bad right now can be a blessing in disguise someday, we have to say never say never for our failures. Smiling about the past gives us affirmative attitudes and sentiments for what we did and it can be a good starting point to do the next thing. As you know, life is full of ups and downs for everyone, which is no exception. Therefore, having a positive estimation on your life is no option but a must .On top of that, in this regard, we also need to have a mercy on others' mishaps as well as ours.

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Hey, Steve. Your writing skills are developing nicely. Keep practicing writing in English to refine your sentence structure and expression. I appreciate you taking the time to check on the homework topic and sharing your thoughts about it. Keep up the great work. I'll see you in our next class. ~Jane ^__^


I hope so. 
>> I hope I can smile about past events. 

I think negativities about our past won't help at all. 
>> CORRECT 
OR>> I think focusing on the negativities of our past won't help at all. 

If we made vile errors and mistakes, we should take it as positively as possible for days ahead and try to learn a lesson for the brighter future. 
>> If we make vile errors and mistakes, we should take it as positively as possible for days ahead and try to learn a lesson for a brighter future. 

As if something bad right now can be a blessing in disguise someday, we have to say never say never for our failures. 
>> As if something bad right now can be a blessing in disguise someday, we have to say, "Never say never" to our failures. 

Smiling about the past gives us affirmative attitudes and sentiments for what we did and it can be a good starting point to do the next thing. 
>> CORRECT 

As you know, life is full of ups and downs for everyone, which is no exception. 
>> CORRECT 

Therefore, having a positive estimation on your life is no option but a must . 
>> Therefore, having a positive estimation of your life is no option but a must. 

On top of that, in this regard, we also need to have a mercy on others' mishaps as well as ours.
>> On top of that, in this regard, we also need to have mercy on others' mishaps as well as ours.


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