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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the five most important things you should consider when going on a business trip?

When we going on a business trip, there are many thing's we should consider.
Furthermore, there are more things to consider when we meeting new people or foreigners.
What I think is important in a business trip is clothing, manners, purpose of business trip, schedule, and relationship formation.
If someone ask to me "why are you going on a business trip?", I'll say that the purpose of the business and maintain relationships are the most important.
This mean that ultimately, our business is the most important, but the relationship between the buyer and the seller is also important.
These days, many people have a meetings through online(internet applications).
But, I think there are many limitations to communication online.
That's why we sometimes go to see them or welcome them if they come to see us.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the five most important things you should consider when going on a business trip?


When we going on a business trip, there are many thing's we should consider.
>> When we go on a business trip, there are many things we should consider.
OR >> When going on a business trip, there are many things we should consider.
Furthermore, there are more things to consider when we meeting new people or foreigners.
>> Furthermore, there are more things to consider when we meet new people or foreigners.
OR >> Furthermore, there are more things to consider when meeting new people or foreigners.
What I think is important in a business trip is clothing, manners, purpose of business trip, schedule, and relationship formation.
>> I think the 5 important things when going on a business trip are clothing, manners, purpose of business trip, schedule, and relationship formation.
If someone ask to me "why are you going on a business trip?", I'll say that the purpose of the business and maintain relationships are the most important.
>> If someone asks me, "why are you going on a business trip?", I'll say the purpose of the business and maintaining relationships are the most important.
This mean that ultimately, our business is the most important, but the relationship between the buyer and the seller is also important.
>> This ultimately means that our business is the most important thing, but the relationship between the buyer and the seller is also important.
These days, many people have a meetings through online (internet applications).
>> These days, many people have meetings online (internet applications).
But, I think there are many limitations to communication online.
>> But, I think there are many limitations to communicate online.
That's why we sometimes go to see them or welcome them if they come to see us.
>> CORRECT!
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