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I think Having a vice is habit.
It is influenced by environmental.
People¡¯s disposition is natural but also can be changed by others.such as national,parents and friends.
Most of all right judgement and strong willingness are important to make their disposition.
So people can fix their vice.

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Ms. Sunny!
Let's have a comparison of vices and habits 
While bad habits can have detrimental effects, they are generally seen as less severe and are more about personal improvement. On the other hand, a 'vice' is a more serious and morally weighted term. It usually denotes a practice or habit considered immoral, sinful, or harmful to oneself or others.
Habits can be both good and bad. example of a good habit is her habit of waking up early and jogging for 30 minutes before going to work.
Thank you for this!
Aki~

I think Having a vice is habit.
>> I think Having a vice is a habit.

It is influenced by environmental.
>>> It is influenced by the environment.

People¡¯s disposition is natural but also can be changed by others.such as national,parents and friends.
>>> People¡¯s disposition is natural but also can be changed by others. such as national, parents, and friends.

Most of all right judgement and strong willingness are important to make their disposition.
>>> Most of all right judgment and strong willingness are important to make their disposition.

So people can fix their vice.
>>> So people can fix their vices.
>>> Still, people can quit their vices.

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