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Homework :

Are we in a man's world? Why or Why not?

Answer :

First, ¡®man¡¯s world¡¯ is dangerous phrase as I think. because many people in the would don¡¯t like gender issue and that is not a easy problem, especially in Korea. Many young people in Korea are sensitive about it.
But we couldn¡¯t avoid about this issue. We have to face to it. by the way if I have to choice man¡¯s world or woman¡¯s world, then I choose the former. But it should be changed in the future in right way.

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Hi Jeong,
Thank you for submitting your homework. See you later :)
~ T. Demi ^^

First, ¡®man¡¯s world¡¯ is dangerous phrase as I think. because many people in the would don¡¯t like gender issue and that is not a easy problem, especially in Korea. 

>> First, I think the term "man's world is dangerous because many people around the world have issues with gender, especially in Korea.
Many young people in Korea are sensitive about it.
CORRECT!
But we couldn¡¯t avoid about this issue. 
>> But we cannot avoid this issue.
We have to face to it. 
>> We have to face it.
by the way if I have to choice man¡¯s world or woman¡¯s world, then I choose the former. 
>> By the way, If I had to choose between a man's world or a woman's world, I would choose the former.
But it should be changed in the future in right way.
>>But it should be properly changed in the future.
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