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I like Millie Bobby Brown Actually she is Spaniard. But as you know I've watched is "stranger things" since she was young. When I watched that movie, I thought her acting was impressive. Because the character is person with supernatural powers. So she had to use her strength and be in pain in the movie. So after that time I watched movies of her's other things like ¡°Enola Holmes" She is younger than my brother but Her acting was great. So I became a fan of her.

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Hi Su, 

Thank you for doing your homework. I like Millie Bobby Brown too. She is a great actress. She has new movie entitled " Damsel". It's a great watch. I recommend it. ^^

-Teacher Ash

Corrections:

I like Millie Bobby Brown Actually she is Spaniard.
>> I like Millie Bobby Brown. She is Spanish.

But as you know I've watched is "stranger things" since she was young. 
>>As you know, I've only watched "Stranger Things". I watched it since it started. 

When I watched that movie, I thought her acting was impressive.
>> When I watched that series, I thought her acting was impressive.

Because the character is person with supernatural powers.
>> In the series, she is someone with supernatural powers. 

So she had to use her strength and be in pain in the movie.
>> She had to use her strength and endure pain. 

So after that time I watched movies of her's other things like ¡°Enola Holmes"
>> Because of that, I watched other movies she starred in, like "Enola Holmes." 

She is younger than my brother but Her acting was great.
>>She is younger than my brother, but her acting was great.

So I became a fan of her.
>>So, I became a fan of her.
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