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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Why is it important to have an insurance?

We often face the unexpected accident.
For example, there are suddenly we feel sick or injured to require surgery.
In this case, insurance reduce the hospital an surgery cost.
Even them, these days, gadget insurance and also pet insurance are popular in my country.
Those case also the insurance help to our financial burden.
And another insurance roles, there are a lot of real estate scams in Korea.
So, many people register insurance before contracts.
At this case, insurance can help as an arbitration when the owner and tenant(resident) has a big problem.
Because, insurance manager knows the law better than the normal people.
So, the insurance help to us, but I'm tired because they're induced to join too much.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Why is it important to have an insurance?


We often face the unexpected accidents.
>> CORRECT!
For example, there are suddenly we feel sick or injured to require surgery.
>> For example, there are cases wherein suddenly we feel sick or injured that requires surgery.
In this case, insurance reduce the hospital an surgery cost.
>> In this case, insurance reduces the hospital and surgery fees.
Even them, these days, gadget insurance and also pet insurance are popular in my country.
>> CORRECT!
Those case also the insurance help to our financial burden.
>> Those things are also insured, and it helps us with our financial burden.
And another insurance roles, there are a lot of real estate scams in Korea.
>> And for another insurance role, there are a lot of real estate scams in Korea.
So, many people register insurance before contracts.
>> CORRECT!
At this case, insurance can help as an arbitration when the owner and tenant(resident) has a big problem.
>> At this case, insurance can help as an arbitration when the owner and tenant(resident) have a big problem.
Because, the insurance manager knows the law better than normal people.
>> CORRECT!
So, the insurance help to us, but I'm tired because they're induced to join too much.
>> So, the insurance helps us, but I'm tired because they're induced in encouraging people to join.

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