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How does education help make things fair for everyone, including girls, and give power to women?

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Education help make things fair. First, by education we can learn about fairness and how to achieve that. It can be hard to think about fairness and reach desirable conclusion alone. It is tough to expect someone who earns benefits from unfair society to ponder the importance of fairness.
Second, fair chance for education brings fair society especially in modern society. Education brings ability and ability gives power. If someone has no chance to get education, then he or she will be easy to be neglected. And if that happens to entire women, it will be shortcut to get to unfair society, which happened in our society for hundreds of years.
So the conclusion is educating importance of fairness and giving fair chance for education will help our society more fair.

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Hi Seong Eun, 

Your points about education and fairness are spot on. Education teaches us about fairness and empowers individuals to strive for it. By ensuring everyone has access to education, especially women, we create a more equal society. Keep up the great work! 

~Teacher Cathy  

 

Education help make things fair.  

>>Education helps make things fair. 

First, by education we can learn about fairness and how to achieve that.  

>>Firstly, through education, we can learn about fairness and how to achieve it. 

It can be hard to think about fairness and reach desirable conclusion alone.  

>>It can be challenging to contemplate fairness and reach desirable conclusions alone. 

It is tough to expect someone who earns benefits from unfair society to ponder the importance of fairness. 

>>It is tough to expect someone who benefits from an unfair society to ponder the importance of fairness. 

Second, fair chance for education brings fair society especially in modern society.  

>>Secondly, a fair chance for education brings a fair society, especially in modern society. 

Education brings ability and ability gives power.  

>>CORRECT 

OR>>Education gives you skills, and skills give you power. 

If someone has no chance to get education, then he or she will be easy to be neglected.  

>>If someone has no chance to get an education, then he or she will be easy to be neglected. 

And if that happens to entire women, it will be shortcut to get to unfair society, which happened in our society for hundreds of years. 

>>And if that happens to all women, it will be a shortcut to creating an unfair society, which has occurred in our society for hundreds of years. 

So the conclusion is educating importance of fairness and giving fair chance for education will help our society more fair. 

>>So the conclusion is educating the importance of fairness and giving a fair chance for education will help our society become more fair. 

 

 

 

 

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