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What things about Korea do you think Korean people are proud of?

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I don't know what Korean people are most proud of.
But there is one thing I am most proud of.
That is Korea.
I am proud of Korea itself.
Because Korea exists, I also exist.

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Hi Sunny!
Great job!
Just take note of how you begin your sentences.
Avoid starting your sentences with conjunctions like "but" and "because."
Other than that, the composition was very smooth and clear.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I don't know what Korean people are most proud of.
>> Correct
But there is one thing I am most proud of.
>> However, there is one thing I am most proud of.
That is Korea.
>> Correct
I am proud of Korea itself.
>> Correct
Because Korea exists, I also exist.
>> It's because if Korea exists, I also exist.
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