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What do you think of people comparing themselves to others?

작성자: 이*윤
2024-03-18 1174

회원님의 영작문

In Korea, people are comparing themselves to others always happen and are inevitable.
It's because in Korea, I have to be better than ohters to be chosen.
To exaggerate, we are compared to other people from the time we are in the mother's womb.
Everything from height to weight.
As we grow up, grades, educational background, employment, and marriage are all subject to comparison.
But I don't think such a comparision is good.
It can adversely affect others, including myself.
I think when you start to compare with others, there is no end to it, and it encourages competition with people.
Then I'm sure it will be a world of conflict and distrust.
Also, if you continue to compare yourself to other people, your self-esteem will decrease, your inferiority complex will worsen, and you may hate yourself and fall into severe depression.
Perhaps, the reason why there are so many people who are psychologically and mentally sickness in Korea is because of comparison.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Well said, Yun!
You know, it is difficult to find yourself in a position where you have to compare yourself against others. If you are already drowning in self-loathing bad ideas about yourself, it will be difficult to get out of that scenario. We can get out of the position, but it will be difficult, especially if we don't feel like we're making any progress toward our goals in life. Patience and balance are important.~ 
Chammy
In Korea, people are comparing themselves to others always happen and are inevitable.
>>Correct
It's because in Korea, I have to be better than ohters to be chosen.
>>It's because, in Korea, I have to be better than others to be chosen.
To exaggerate, we are compared to other people from the time we are in the mother's womb.
Everything from height to weight.
As we grow up, grades, educational background, employment, and marriage are all subject to comparison.
>>Correct
But I don't think such a comparision is good.
>>But I don't think such a comparison is good.
It can adversely affect others, including myself.
I think when you start to compare with others, there is no end to it, and it encourages competition with people.
Then I'm sure it will be a world of conflict and distrust.
Also, if you continue to compare yourself to other people, your self-esteem will decrease, your inferiority complex will worsen, and you may hate yourself and fall into severe depression.
>>Correct
Perhaps, the reason why there are so many people who are psychologically and mentally sickness in Korea is because of comparison.
>>Perhaps, the reason why there are so many people who are psychologically and mentally sick in Korea is because of comparison.
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