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My thought about single mother in Korea

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2024-03-18 951

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I think most single mother are forced to give birth and raise their children.
In Korea, the Constitutional Court ruled that the anti-abortion law was unconstitutional in April 2019, because this law violates women's basic right to self-determination about pregnancy.
However, the laws related to abortion have not yet been changed. Women and doctor who did abortions still be punished in criminal laws.
Also women who want abortion still need spousal consent even though she don't know who is a father of baby or she can't contact with father of baby.
In addition, some women give proof of her pregnancy due to sex crimes.

So that's why most single mother give birth and raise their children.
But some mother leave their orphanage, others do abortion illegally, and the others neglect or abused their children.
I think it is very serious issues in Korea, so it is necessary that abortion-related laws are amended in the National Assembly.

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Your answer shows your awareness about the issue, Min. I respect your views and opinions about this topic. Job well done! ^^
-Khai
I think most single mother are forced to give birth and raise their children.

>> I think most single mothers are forced to give birth and raise their children.

In Korea, the Constitutional Court ruled that the anti-abortion law was unconstitutional in April 2019, because this law violates women's basic right to self-determination about pregnancy.

>> CORRECT

However, the laws related to abortion have not yet been changed.

>> However, the laws related to abortion remain the same.

Women and doctor who did abortions still be punished in criminal laws.

>> Women and doctors who did abortions are still punished in criminal laws.

Also women who want abortion still need spousal consent even though she don't know who is a father of baby or she can't contact with father of baby.

>> Also, some women who want to commit abortion still need spousal consent even though they don't know who’s the father of the baby or sometimes, the woman can't contact the father of the baby.

In addition, some women give proof of her pregnancy due to sex crimes.

>> In addition, some women give proof of their pregnancy due to sex crimes.

So that's why most single mother give birth and raise their children.

>> So that's why most single mothers give birth and raise their children.

But some mother leave their orphanage, others do abortion illegally, and the others neglect or abused their children.

>> But some mothers leave their babies in an orphanage; others do abortions illegally, and others neglect or abuse their children.

I think it is very serious issues in Korea, so it is necessary that abortion-related laws are amended in the National Assembly.

>> I think these are very serious issues in Korea, so it is necessary that abortion-related laws are amended in the National Assembly.


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