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What makes us feel unsuccessful?

작성자: 이*윤
2024-03-15 597

회원님의 영작문

Honestly, I think all the emotions I feel these days make me feel like I'm unsuccessful.
First of all ther is anxiety.
Because there is no achievement in an uncertain future, it seems to make me feel unsuccessful.
Also, it seems to make me feel that my comparison with others has been unsuccessful.
This seems to be the main reason.
In Korea, it has more comparisons with other people than other countries.
What kind of university you went to, what kind of company you go to, what kind of person you marry, and what kind of house you live in are all subject to comparison.
If others have done it, but I haven't done it yet, it intensifies the feeling.
For example, my friends are almost employed, but my situation, which is still preparing for employment, may make me feel unsuccessful compared to my friends.
If these emotions are repeated, you may fall into a greater sense of depression as your self-esteem decreases and you become inferior.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

I hope you are doing fine, Yun!
you know, I am experiencing similar feelings and thoughts as well. However, I suppose it is all in our heads. First and foremost, we need to adopt a more optimistic outlook and focus on the goals we truly want to accomplish in life. As a result, we have the power to draw in what we manifest. 
Chammy
Honestly, I think all the emotions I feel these days make me feel like I'm unsuccessful.
>>Correct
First of all ther is anxiety.
>>First of all, there is anxiety.
Because there is no achievement in an uncertain future, it seems to make me feel unsuccessful.
Also, it seems to make me feel that my comparison with others has been unsuccessful.
This seems to be the main reason.
In Korea, it has more comparisons with other people than other countries.
>>Correct
What kind of university you went to, what kind of company you go to, what kind of person you marry, and what kind of house you live in are all subject to comparison.
>>What kind of university you went to, what kind of company you went to, what kind of person you married, and what kind of house you lived in are all subject to comparison.
If others have done it, but I haven't done it yet, it intensifies the feeling.
For example, my friends are almost employed, but my situation, which is still preparing for employment, may make me feel unsuccessful compared to my friends.
If these emotions are repeated, you may fall into a greater sense of depression as your self-esteem decreases and you become inferior.
>>Correct
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