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I agree with Carson's because there are reason why celebrities are famous. The reason is like they work hard and they work well.
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Hello, Henry!
Indeed, it's important for us not to be affected by negative news and instead focus on positive examples of dedication and success.
~ Teacher Maxine

I agree with Carson's because there are reason why celebrities are famous. 
>> I agree with Carson because there are reasons why celebrities are famous.

The reason is like they work hard and they work well.
>> The reason is that they work hard and perform well.

And we must be not effected from bad news.
>> And we must not be affected by bad news.

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