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I agree with Carson's because there are reason why celebrities are famous. The reason is like they work hard and they work well.
And we must be not effected from bad news.

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Hello, Henry!
Indeed, it's important for us not to be affected by negative news and instead focus on positive examples of dedication and success.
~ Teacher Maxine

I agree with Carson's because there are reason why celebrities are famous. 
>> I agree with Carson because there are reasons why celebrities are famous.

The reason is like they work hard and they work well.
>> The reason is that they work hard and perform well.

And we must be not effected from bad news.
>> And we must not be affected by bad news.

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