¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

homework

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ÃÖ*Ç
2024-03-13 1379

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the pros and cons of drinking energy drinks?

Energy drinks are popular among the sports drinks these days.
Most people who want drink energy drinks for exercise, work and study.
It's because they want to awaken the body's ability using caffeine.
So energy drinks's different name is high caffeine drink.
The energy drinks pros is awaken.
Using the awaken to keep our condition or don't get tired easily.
But, this kinds of drinks for awaken, has a big cons.
The first is our sleep patterns changed.
Usually, the caffeine's effect appear late night, so if I want fall asleep right away, but I'll feel insomnia.
Next cons is addiction caffeine.
Addicts easily feel tired and if they don't drink caffeine drinks they feel a headache.
It's unfortunate, but we can easily to find people who drinks coffee or somethings.
Even them, teenagers eat more caffeine drinks than adults.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the pros and cons of drinking energy drinks?


Energy drinks are popular among the sports drinks these days.
>> Energy drinks are popular sports drinks these days.
Most people who want drink energy drinks for exercise, work and study.
>> Most people drink energy drinks for exercise, work, and study.
It's because they want to awaken the body's ability using caffeine.
>> CORRECT!
So energy drinks's different name is high caffeine drink.
>> So, another name for energy drinks is high caffeine drinks.
The energy drinks pros is awaken.
>> The energy drinks' pros is to keep you awake.
Using the awaken to keep our condition or don't get tired easily.
>> Being awake and energized keep us in good condition, and don't get tired easily.
But, this kinds of drinks for awaken, has a big cons.
>> But, this kind of drinks has big cons.
The first is our sleep patterns changed.
>> First, it changes our sleeping patterns.
Usually, the caffeine's effect appear late night, so if I want fall asleep right away, but I'll feel insomnia.
>> Usually, the caffeine's effect appear late night, so if I want fall asleep right away, but I'll have insomnia.
Next cons is addiction caffeine.
>> Next cons is addiction to caffeine.
Addicts easily feel tired and if they don't drink caffeine drinks they feel a headache.
>> Addicts easily feel tired and if they don't drink caffeinated drinks, they have a headache.
It's unfortunate, but we can easily to find people who drinks coffee or somethings.
>> It's unfortunate, but we can easily find people who drink coffee or something else.
Even them, teenagers eat more caffeine drinks than adults.
>> Even them, teenagers drink more caffeinated drinks than adults.
OR >> Even them, teenagers consume more caffeinated drinks than adults.

¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
136895 Homework ·ù*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2024-05-02 1124
136894 Homework ¼Û*ÈÆ ¿Ï·á 2024-05-02 1128
136893 What decade has produced the best music? ¿À*Çö ¿Ï·á 2024-05-02 1217
136892 control ¹Î*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2024-05-02 1
136891 Home ±Ç*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2024-05-02 0
136890 Home ±Ç*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2024-05-02 0
136889 Home ±Ç*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2024-05-02 0
136888 HW ³ª*Áø ¿Ï·á 2024-05-02 1141
136887 What kinds of jobs interest you most and least? ±è*ȯ ¿Ï·á 2024-05-02 1370
136886 HOMEWORK FOR 05.02.2024 WRITING TASK: Can you be angry without... ÀÓ*Áö ¿Ï·á 2024-05-02 4
136885 Real estate is the most beautiful property. À±*Çý ¿Ï·á 2024-05-02 1276
136884 It\'s very difficult to help at no cost. À±*Çý ¿Ï·á 2024-05-02 1482
136883 I don\'t respect anyone. À±*Çý ¿Ï·á 2024-05-02 1571
136882 How does the government respond to and manage wildfires? ¹Ú*È£ ¿Ï·á 2024-05-02 1136
136881 About my children\'s careers ¾ç*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2024-05-02 1143
136880 Homework ±è*´Ô ¿Ï·á 2024-05-02 1193
136879 1.May.2024 ±è*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2024-05-02 1
136878 Who do you think should take care of the elderly? ¿À*¼Ò ¿Ï·á 2024-05-02 0
136877 Describe an old person you know. ¿À*¼Ò ¿Ï·á 2024-05-02 0
136876 How would you describe the best sleep you could get? ¹Ú*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2024-05-02 1668

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04