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How does social media affect teenagers\' self-esteem?

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In social media, we can see lots of perfect things, perfect face, perfect body, perfect voice, etc. They say us that we should change. It may seem good cause they makes us be better person. But the real problem is the image of social media is adjusted to look good so we never approach that level of perfection. Teenagers also know that the image of social media is not real but only in their head cause in the social media it seems that perfection is normal. As a result they find the reason why they can't reach perfection not in the standard of perfection but in themselves; they think they are wrong. This affects their self esteem in bad ways.

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Hi Seong Eun, 

Your essay delves into a crucial topic, highlighting how social media can shape teenagers' perceptions of themselves. The portrayal of perfection on social platforms can create unrealistic standards, leading teenagers to believe they fall short. It's essential to recognize the disparity between social media images and reality to safeguard self-esteem. Keep shedding light on these important issues! 

~Teacher Cathy 

 

In social media, we can see lots of perfect things, perfect face, perfect body, perfect voice, etc.  

>>CORRECT 

OR>>On social media, we often encounter numerous instances of perfection: perfect faces, perfect bodies, perfect voices, and so on. 

They say us that we should change.  

>>They tell us that we should change. 

It may seem good cause they makes us be better person 

>>It may seem good cause they make us a better person.  

But the real problem is the image of social media is adjusted to look good so we never approach that level of perfection.  

>>CORRECT 

OR>>However, the real issue is that social media images are often manipulated to appear flawless, making it unattainable for us to reach such levels of perfection. 

Teenagers also know that the image of social media is not real but only in their head cause in the social media it seems that perfection is normal.  

>>Even if teenagers know that the image of social media is not real, they don't realize it because it seems like perfection is normal on social media. 

As a result they find the reason why they can't reach perfection not in the standard of perfection but in themselves; they think they are wrong.  

>>As a result, they find the reason why they can't reach perfection not in the standard of perfection but in themselves; they think they are wrong.  

This affects their self esteem in bad ways. 

>>This affects their self-esteem in bad ways. 

 

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